HKCEE Writing Task 2 - a Letter to Editor

Revised version

Dear editor,

I agree that it is more important to be intelligent than to have a good look. If I can only choose one of them, I would choose intelligence.

With a beautiful look, it helps increase your self-confident, so you will feel great about yourself. You can also attract more people looking at you. Sometimes, you can even attract persons of the opposite sex to express their love to you.

But in fact, beauty is short-termed, therefore it cannot stand the time. People can easily forget you when time passes. The external of beauty is not important, it is because when you become aged, the external of beauty will also disappear.

For the advantage of intelligence, it has a long-term value. With intelligence one can easily solve problems, memorise new concepts, and understand how things work. If we are intelligent, we can easily make achievement, we can make contribution in our work, and we can also learn new things.

In fact, I cannot find any disadvantage of being intelligent. So I believe intelligence has nothing to do with disadvantages. However, if we are stupid, we will be very inconvenient in daily live.

Base on the above points, we can see that it is more important to be intelligent than to have a good look. I think the main point is that intelligence can last forever,


Best Regards
Chris Wong
Chris Wong

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Original Version

Dear editor,
I’m agree that it is more important to be intelligent than good-looking. If I can only choice one of them, I would to choose intelligent.
For advantage of beauty, if you are beautiful, you will get self-confident and feel so good, so that you can make more people looking for you. Sometimes, you also can attract opposite sex love you.
But in fact, beauty is short termed, therefore you can get people to love you less time. The external of beauty is not important, it is because when you become to age, the external of beauty will disappear.
For the advantage of intelligent, it is ever can be use. It can help solve problem, remember some things, and understand some things. If we are intelligent, we can easy to achieve activities of daily livings, we can easy to achieve our work, and we can easy to understand our studies. Totally, it can make us to get convenient in many things. When you become to age, it will not disappear.
In fact, I can not find the disadvantage of intelligent. And also, I believe intelligent is no disadvantage, it has most advantages only. If people are stupid that they will feel inconvenience in daily livings.
Base on above points, we can see that it is more important to be intelligent than good-looking. Intelligent is more important, I think the main point is intelligent can be use forever, whatever, whenever...etc.
I’m witting for your reply.

• D - 3
• Generally meet the task requirements,
• Generally relevant content,
• Ideas generally developed,
• Generally appropriate sentences,
• Grammar generally accurate,
• Limited range of vocabulary,
• Generally good organization,
• Generally good cohesion,
• Generally good idea link,
• Generally good style,
• Generally well achieved aim,
• Generally sensitive to reader’s needs.

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