23rd March, 2008
Dear editor,
I do not agree that having a good personal hygiene is enough to help decrease the spread of flu virus. In fact, a good personal hygiene may be able to help decrease the spread of flu virus, but it is not enough to stop it from spreading. I would like to give some of my views about that.
I think if we want to decrease the spread of flu virus, we must pay attention to our daily routines, such as personal hygiene, sport activities, a balanced diet.
To keep the personal hygiene, we should wash our hands thoroughly and take a bath daily. Cleaning our house is also important. We should wash our clothes daily. If we have got a running nose, we should use face mask in the public place. We should also use water or tissue to clean ourselves immediately after sneezing.
To keep us strong, we should exercise and engage in sport activities every day. For example, we can walk eight thousands steps daily, do some exercise daily, etc. Also, we can play some ball games in our free time.
To have a balanced diet, we should eat regularly. Don’t miss any meal. Don’t eat too much snack. People should eat healthy food at meal, for example, vegetable, fruit, fish, meat, and rice.
Generally speaking, having a good personal hygiene is not enough to help decrease the spread of flu virus. We should also keep ourselves strong by regular exercise and eat healthy food. If we can pay attention to the suggestions, we can keep ourselves healthy and clean. The virus will then disappear soon.
Regards
John Lee
John Lee
- B – 5
- Highly meet the task requirements,
- Highly relevant content,
- Ideas very well developed,
- Very well written sentences,
- Highly accurate grammar,
- Very wide range of vocabulary,
- Very good organization,
- Very good cohesion,
- Very good idea link,
- Very good style,
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Original Version
Dear editor:I not agree that people have a good personal hygiene is enough to help decrease the spread of flu virus. In fact, people have a good personal hygiene is able to help decrease the spread of flu virus, but not enough. I would like to raise to you some points about that.
I think people want to decrease the spread of flu virus, they must pay attention for accustomed of life, there are personal hygiene, sport, balanced of diet.
For the personal hygiene, people should wash their hand hardly and go to bath daily. Cleaning their house is important also. They should wash their clothes daily. If they have got running nose, they should use water or tissue to clean that immediately.
For the sport, people should be fit of sport daily, for example, walking eight thousands steps daily, doing morning exercise daily…etc. Also, people can play some ball games at free time.
For the balanced of diet, people should eat at every morning, afternoon, night. Don’t miss any meal. Don’t eat a lot of snacks. People should eat some health’s food at every meal, for example, vegetable, fruit, fish, meat…etc.
Generally, having a good personal hygiene is not enough to help decrease the spread of flu virus. People should achieve above three tasks that they can help to decrease the spread of flu virus. People must keep doing those, and don’t halfway give up.
Regards
John Lee
John Lee
23-3-2008
- D - 3
- Generally meet the task requirements,
- Generally relevant content,
- Ideas generally developed,
- Generally appropriate sentences,
- Grammar generally accurate,
- Limited range of vocabulary,
- Generally good organization,
- Generally good cohesion,
- Generally good idea link,
- Generally good style,
- Generally well achieved aim,
- Generally sensitive to reader’s needs.
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