I am writing to share a fearful experience of my first visit to Hong Kong. Last summer, I joined a three day tour to Hong Kong with my girl friend. We have a pleasant beginning but with an unhappy ending.
On the first day, when we arrived at Hong Kong international airport in the morning, I felt very excited. Then, we went to Tsim Sha Tsui to the hotel that we stayed. In the afternoon, we went to buy some souvenirs for our parents., we arrived at the harbor city. I bought a new mobile phone for my dad because his mobile phone was broken. My girl friend bought a lot of brand cosmetic products, such as Doir, Fancl and Tommy. They were very expensive.
When we finished shopping, we went to Aberdeen for dinner. Aberdeen is one of the most popular places for sea food in Hong Kong. We ordered three dishes of sea food, such as shelter sauté crab and sauté lobster. They were very delicious and I was interested in trying them again.
On the second day, we went swimming in Repulse Bay in the morning. We also bought some bread and chicken wings for our barbecue trip. When we arrived at the barbecuing site, we saw few teenagers leaving some decanters on the ground. Also, they did not throw the rubbish into the litter bins .They threw it every where . My leg started bleeding when I stepped on the broken decanter .We called the ambulance immediately. So, all the activities were cancelled in the afternoon. I felt very unhappy about the unexpected accident.
I must say I feel very disappointed with the Hong Kong tour because the unexpected event happened. I also had a horrible experience when I went swimming in the beach. I wish the Hong Kong government will do more to protect the environment.
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HORRIBLE EXPERIENCE IN HONG KONG
I am writing to share my fearful experience of the first time visit of Hong Kong. Last summer, i joined a three day tour to Hong Kong with my girl-friend. We have a pleasant beginning and unhappy ending.
On the first day. We arrived Hong Kong international airport in the morning. I felt very excited when I arrived .After that, we went to Tsim Sha Tsui to check in the hotel. In the afternoon, we would like to buy some souvenirs for our parents. Therefore , we went to travel harbor city. I bought a new mobile phone for my dad because his mobile phone was broken. As for my honey, she bought lots of branded cosmetic such as Doir, Fancl and Tommy. It is very expensive .When we finished shopping, we went to Aberdeen for our dinner. Aberdeen is the most popular place to provide sea food. We ordered three type of sea food. For example, shelter sauté crab and sauté lobster. It is very delicious because i was interested to try again.
Second day, we went swimming in Repulse Bay in the morning. We also bought some bread and chicken wings to barbecue. When we arrived the barbecue, we saw few teenager who fell decanters on the floor. Move rover ,they did not throw the rubbish into the litter bin .They threw it on the floor.Suddenly.my leg was blooding because it made by broken decanter .We needed to call the ambulance immediately. So, all of activity will be cancel in the afternoon. I felt unexpected accident.
Lastly, I felt very disappointed in the this tour because i unexpected event was appear. Besides I have a horrible experience about swimming. I wish the government will be done more protection of environment.
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