HKCEE Writing Task 1 - An Embarrassing Experience

One day after the lesson, Peter, a shy boy invited Amy, his beautiful classmate to go to the cinema with him on Saturday .Amy was very happy to accept his invitation. She was very excited, too.

On Friday, Amy went to a Fashion House to buy some new clothes. She also went to Hair Salon to have her hair cut. Now, Amy looked very different now.

When Saturday arrived, Amy wore her new dress to the cinema. Her mother told her not to be too late to come home.

Amy met Peter at the entrance of the cinema, but she was very embarrassed. She saw many of her classmates sitting around Peter and her. Peter felt embarrassed, too. Both of them would like the movie to finish as soon as possible. (132 words)

• C - 4
  Meet the task requirements,
  Relevant content,
  Ideas well developed,
  Good sentences,
  Accurate grammar,
  Wide range of vocabulary,
  Good organization,
  Good cohesion,
  Good idea link,
  Good style,
  Well achieved aim,
  Sensitive to reader’s needs.